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Wednesday, 29 October 2014

beach


W.A.L.T put lots of detail in our story

what we did is explain what we did in summer we done this because our class chose to and what I think I done well was that I did a very good job with my writing. What I think I should do better next time is make it a bit more interesting.

That was summer



when you went to the beach
and you ran across the hot burning rocks and sand.

And you bombed in the water and made a big splash.

And you squeezed your hands in the nice warm sand.

And you could smelled all the sweet fresh air.

And you saw all your friends running in excitement

Remember that time when you see the sprinkles and sparkles on the salt water.

Remember how the seagulls were so annoying when they were squawking?
That was summer.


1 comment:

  1. Yeah boy! Keanu that is a primo story. I really do know how it feels to be at the beach with all the annoying seagulls and the sand is hot also the rocks are really hot. Also I always love to feel the breeze against my face. Well your tuhituhi is ka mau te wehi.

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